“Start setting up your tents, guys. Put them in a circle, not
too close of the fire.”
The boys went about their business and soon the tents were set
up in decent order. Everyone started collecting firewood. Newman
gathered his share and began breaking the branches, separating them
according to size. As the boys filtered back into camp with
scraggly bundles under their arms, Jarred came running up with a
small electronic device in his hand. “Mr. Newman, Mr. Newman,” he
said, “Something’s happened. It’s on the news.” He held up a screen
showing some kind of battleship.
Newman’s ground his teeth. “Jared, didn’t I tell you not to
bring any of those electronic things? Now put that away. We’re up
here to forget about all that stuff.”
Purp| 9.18.12 @ 11:07AM
What a waste of space.
Bob Grant| 9.18.12 @ 8:01PM
What a concise, succinct description of your post.
Pelleas| 9.18.12 @ 12:35PM
This "novel" ranks in the same class as "The Innocence of Mohammed", in its "OY-VEY, THIS CAN"T be for real" awfulness ( just in pure writing...if nothing else..)
It is almost so horrendous , it trancends the "so BAD , it's hilariously "good" classification...
Conservative Bob| 9.18.12 @ 6:36PM
Mr. Tucker please pay no attention to the vile festering puss sacks above. They have accomplished and created nothing in their miserable joyless lives. They are envious of all that they see yet unwilling to extend the effort to achieve or acquire. They occupy dank musty space in their mother’s basement and rail at the word in their jealousy and envy, spending their hours hiding behind their key boards and pretend that their life has meaning. Since they have no skill or ambition and can make no tangible contribution they attack others in the mistaken belief that in tearing someone else down they gain significance.
I enjoyed this snippet of your novel and look forward to reading the rest.
Tafuna| 9.18.12 @ 6:56PM
I'm not sure why your two hecklers are so upset with your story thus far. After all it describes the liberal utopian world that they are striving for.
Great so far-- anxious to see the new installment. Reminds me of how Dickens released his novels during the 19th century.
Bob Grant| 9.18.12 @ 7:58PM
It's an enjoyable read but I'll ask this question again:
Will we have a country in 2065?
The dystopia begins in a scant couple of years, not decades.
mike 3/505| 9.18.12 @ 9:58PM
"The dystopia begins in a scant couple of years, not decades."
Why do you think Mr. Tucker is writing this novel today? If he waits too long, he won't be allowed to.